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Assignment five – amendments

My final assignment for ‘The Art of Photography’ course was well-received by my tutor and I was pleased that he felt my work displayed a personal voice. He did however feel that I could improve my cover image by adding some embellishments to the text.  Bearing in mind that my graphic design skills are pretty close to zero this did not come as a great surprise.

My original submission for Assignment Five (Applying the techniques of illustration and narrative) can be found here.

Cover

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Original image

The suggestions made by my tutor were to include the date on the cover and also my name. Whilst making these amendments I also increased the size of the text at the bottom left and lightened the colour.  Whilst I am aware that these improvements will not win me any prizes for graphic design I feel that the cover is now more attractive and eye-catching to a potential reader / purchaser of the magazine.

Cover

Amended image

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Assignment three – amendments

I was very pleased with the feedback that I received from my tutor for this assignment – I had really enjoyed shooting this series of images and I feel that this showed both in my work and the subsequent feedback. However, my tutor did suggest a couple of improvements which I will discuss in this post.
My original submission for Assignment Three (Colour) can be found here.

Colour harmony through complementary colours (iii)

170mm, f/11, 1/350, ISO 400

Original image

Whilst my tutor found this a fascinating image with interesting qualities, he directed me to the histogram (which showed slight underexposure) and gave me some ideas as how to increase the overall vibrancy of the picture.

Amended image

Amended image

I tried my tutor’s suggestions and increased the exposure, contrast and vibrancy in Photoshop. I much prefer the amended version as these changes have really brought the image to life, making it spark. I think that with the original image I lacked the confidence to really push the sliders for fear of overdoing the post-processing, but if I had checked the histogram (as my tutor tactfully pointed out) I would have seen what needed to be done. So lesson learned – always check the histogram!

Colour contrast through contrasting colours (iii)

Of the four images that I submitted for this section of the assignment, my tutor felt this was the weakest; whilst he commented favourably on its composition and the capture of the reflected building he felt that the subtle colours let it down.

11: Contrasting colours

Original image

In hindsight, I feel that I took my eye off the ball with this image slightly. I think that I was so pleased to find the composition and reflection, also in the right colour combination, that I let the most important word (i.e. ‘contrast’) of this part of the brief slip from the front of my mind when choosing this image as part of my assignment submission. My tutor got it spot on here with his comments in my view and in light of this I have therefore decided to replace the image for assessment.

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Replacement image

I looked out for a suitable replacement shot for a while without success but then came across the colourful buildings in the Central St. Giles development just off Tottenham Court Road in London. A number of recently-constructed buildings in various bright colours, I felt that they fitted my theme perfectly. I took a number of shots of these adjacent green and orange buildings and chose this one because of its abstractness and the way that the blue of the windows adds additional interest. I took this image using a polariser which has helped maintain the vibrancy of the colours.

I’ve also included a sketch to show the balance and movement in the replacement image._DS2264311a_Contrasting_replacement

Assignment two – amendments

I was very pleased with my tutor’s feedback on my second assignment and even more pleased that he did not suggest that I make any changes to the images that I submitted.  This latter point was probably a very good thing as I had taken some of the images in Jersey so it would have proved to be an expensive re-shoot.

My second assignment (Elements of Design) can be seen here.

However, subsequent to my assignment submission and feedback I went along to an image critique evening held at my local camera club, run by advanced members of the club including an area judge.  I had the idea in the back of my mind that I could dip my toe into the camera club competition world  (our club is very friendly and encourages everyone to enter its competitions, whatever their standard, in order to hopefully learn and improve) and maybe enter some of my Elements of Design images into the forthcoming Digital Projected Image competition.  At the critique evening, two images (out of the five that I took along) were deemed as ‘competition possibles’ and the following changes were suggested:

Distinct, even if irregular shapes

200mm, f/10, 1/500, ISO 320

Original image

It was felt that this image could be improved by cropping the image on the left-hand side to remove the tiny piece of shadow. I had already considered this option before submitting my assignment and had rejected it at the time on the grounds that I didn’t want the image to look too neat and ‘manufactured’ but having thought about it again and comparing the two versions I felt that the advice was valid and that the crop did improve the image by removing a distraction.

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Amended image

I subsequently entered the amended image into the competition (October 2013) and was pleased to receive a score of nine out of ten in the novice section from the judge – not high enough to gain a placing but gratifying nonetheless.

Rhythm (ii)

Apex, Bury St Edmunds

Original image

When this image was displayed on a large projector screen it was noticeable that there was a dirty mark on the paving slab in the bottom right-hand corner and it was suggested that I remove this in Photoshop. I was a bit annoyed with myself as I felt that I should have spotted this when carrying out my original processing to the image.  I was very pleased that the amended image also got a respectable score ( nine out of ten); again just out of the places but a real boost to my confidence.

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Amended image

Both these amended images are now included in my assessment submission.

Assignment one – amendments

My tutor was very positive in his feedback for my first assignment, however there were three images where he felt improvements could be made and he provided with me with constructive comments on these.

My original submission for Assignment One (Contrasts) can be found here.

The first pair that I chose to demonstrate was ‘continuous / intermittent’ and my tutor suggested improvements to both images.

Continuous

My tutor commented that whilst he liked the composition and concept of this image, the camera settings I had used (180mm, f/10) had only focussed on the front bicycle wheel and he gave me some advice as to how to have more of the image in focus. I must admit that I had tried to be creative on the focussing front with this photograph (and also with my ‘intermittent’ image), throwing a lot of the image deliberately out of focus, but I took on board his comments and realised that I can be too smart for my own good sometimes.

Picture 1 a) continuous

Original ‘continuous’

As I liked the concept of my original image I returned to the same Boris Bike docking station (it’s reasonably easy to take photographs there without either getting run over or being in the way of pedestrians) and re-shot the image, using my tutor’s advice to have a small aperture setting and to focus on the midway point. I was pleased with the outcome and consider it to be an improvement on the original image.

Picture_1_a)_continuous (replacement)

Replacement ‘continuous’

Intermittent

As with ‘continuous’ my tutor liked the composition and concept of this image but had the same thoughts regarding the lack of overall focus. I had tried to be creative on the focussing front with this image also but took on board his comments.

Picture 1 b) intermittent

Original  ‘intermittent’

I went back to the docking station to retake the image however, as for my original shot, it took a while to find the opportunity when there were spaces in the rack. This time I had my tripod with me, which made life easier, and I was able to re-shoot the image using a smaller aperture and a mid-way focus point.  Again I can see a definite improvement on the original.

Picture_1_b)_intermittent (replacement)

Replacement ‘intermittent’

Rough

Another image that my tutor felt could be improved was ‘rough ’ (from the pair ‘rough / smooth’). I had commented in my submission that I wished I had been able to use a tripod so that the camera was a fraction higher and my tutor agreed with this comment, also saying that he would preferred to have seen more in focus, referring me back to his earlier comments on settings concerning my ‘continuous / intermittent’ images. Again I took these on board and decided to retake the image.

Picture 3 a) rough

Original ‘rough’

When considering whether to choose a new subject or whether to re-shoot the original image I decided to keep with the subject and to re-shoot it with the same composition in order that I could see exactly how the settings suggested by my tutor would change the image. As the pavement by the building is very narrow I felt it unfair (and dangerous) to make people walk in the road so was again unable to use a tripod to gain extra camera height. However I followed my tutor’s advice with regard to settings and consequently took a shot that was far more in focus than the original and which I am pleased with.

Replacement 'rough'

Replacement ‘rough’

Overall I was pleased with the feedback that I received for Assignment One. I felt that my tutor had taken the time to be both comprehensive and constructive in his review and had provided his feedback and suggestions for improvements in a very positive and encouraging manner.

These three replacement images are now included in my assessment submission.